Where Readers & Writers Connect
by Carol Peterson
And then I had it. A book I had written all by myself. And it was good. And it was funny. And it was mine.
Okay, the truth: it was a 400-page middle grade novel from which you can conclude that it wasn’t that good. But it was funny and it was mine and it was the beginning of my love of writing and creating books.
As I’ve been thinking about my writing journey, I forced myself back into that place where I started 12 years ago. As I reminisced, I found something that made me smile.
Tucked away in a corner of my Word document files was a folder neatly titled “Words for Said.” My newbie writer self had created a list of words I could use instead of saying said. You know—those dialogue tags where one character says:
“Hey, Joe,” Bob said. “How are you?”
In my eagerness to write fabulous dialogue, I figured I needed amazing words to describe how my characters spoke. So I created “the list.” Here it is:
answered, announced, asserted, affirmed, argued, alleged, appealed, articulated, acknowledge, blurted, blasted, bellowed, brought up, chirped, clucked, claimed, cited, confessed, cried, cried out, cheered, contended, clarified, declared, disclosed, described, divulged, disputed, expressed, echoed, howled, hooted, inquired, insisted, imparted, mentioned, murmured, muttered, notified, pronounced, pointed out, pled, piped, proclaimed, professed, quipped, quoted, retorted, replied, revealed, remarked, recited, recounted, rumored, returned, responded, said, stated, spoke, swore, specified, stressed, shrieked, shouted, screeched, told, uttered, voiced, whispered, whooped, yammered, yelped
Did you notice they are in alphabetical order? In my actual list, they are also set out in tidy columns and separated by letters of the alphabet. I’m so utterly left-brained, I’m surprised they weren’t color coded.
But really—how many times will one of my characters “hoot” something to another character who will then “whoop” his response?
It didn’t take me long to realize my list was silly. By that time, I had revised my book to delete all the clucks, hoots, chirps and yammers.
Why? Because said is an invisible word to readers, it’s not boring. It’s comforting. Other words are simply distracting.
Before long however, I heard debates over whether a writer should say “he said” or “said he.” What? Now the order was important?
Not really. Consistency is more important. I could use “he said” or “said he” but should try not to use both. Keep it invisible by keeping it consistent. Now we were getting somewhere.
Ultimately my writing journey took me to a place where I prefer not using “said” at all. Rather, now I favor action tags to clue the reader into who is speaking.
For example: Bob extended his hand. “Hey, Joe. How are you?”
When I opened that “Words for Said” file, I cringed. Then I smiled at the realization of how far I’ve come as a writer; how much I’ve grown; how much I’ve learned. And that’s just looking at one single word and understanding how to use it.
The dictionary is filled with words. And the writing life is waiting to be filled with lessons learned. This could take a while!